Thursday, October 1, 2009

Make a Scene - Judith Albietz

“Go away! Leave us alone, you disgusting beast!” Lily shouted at Mort. With her pink pocket flashlight poised as a weapon in her right hand, Lily decided she had to approach the evil and dangerous dog to lead him away from Sam who still lay paralyzed on the ground.

Lily stared into Mort’s green glowing eyes as she considered her flashlight as a weapon against Mort’s teeth when he went for her throat. As she got closer to where Mort was standing, the rotting garbage smell got stronger and Lily felt like throwing up. But soon anger overtook her nausea when Lily looked over at Mort’s right paw, where bits of blood-spattered blue monkey fur were stuck. Lily tried to remember what she had done in the past when she lost her temper. One time people said she really made a scene, acting like a crazy woman: hitting people and breaking things while hollering all sorts of insults. Well, that was just what the doctor ordered here, she thought. And I’m already doing the crazy woman thing, walking towards a telepathic, supernatural killing machine with nothing for protection but a stupid flashlight.

Continuing to stare into Mort’s eyes as she moved towards him, Lily noticed that he didn’t return eye contact—and that gave her an idea. Lily turned on the flashlight and directed it right into Mort’s eyes. Suddenly the green glow in his eyes was replaced with red and white swirling spiral disks—not quite the reaction she had expected…but in this world she was kinda getting used to be surprised. She found that when she turned off the flashlight, Mort’s eyes went back to normal and she quickly turned the light back on.

Lily knew she couldn’t lose her focus of looking straight at Mort with the flashlight shining into his eyes. She couldn’t look back to see if Sam had been able to get on his feet yet. Just the thought of what Mort had done to Sam made her even madder and she started screaming again, “Coward! You yellow-bellied chicken…picking on innocent blue monkeys…don’t you know everyone hates you. What did you do to Sam? You are loathsome, despicable, scum!” Then Lily picked up some rocks and threw them at the fur-covered serial killer. He still didn’t look in her direction with those weird swirly eyes. It was then that she realized that the light of the flashlight had done something and whatever it was, it made Mort blind. Good thing I put in new batteries.

1 comment:

  1. Really good sense of tension in this one! You do a terrific job staying in the moment, and letting us know what's going inside Lily head. It's all totally believable, and very fun to read.

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